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Brainstorm
enjoy mentality aggressiveness life straightness friends death thankful family

Outline
- I used to be an insecure person - I did not know how to treat people - A friend showed me the hard side of life


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Essay
[|Life is what happens while you are busy making other plans.] - [|John Lennon] **//__Remove link and keep it in the same paragraph.__//**  I used to be the kind of person that is always complaining __for__ everything, for school, life style, and also my appearance. When I was eighteen, somebody arrived __to__ my life and __while more I knew him,__ I was noticing that many years of my life was spent __in__ nothing. There was no reason to think about it but he showed me things that nobody had showed me befo__re, al__so he showed me __with facts a__nd actions that I was living wrong. He never wanted to do it with the intention to make me feel bad with my decisions; in fact, he was trying to hel__p me, tha__nks god he could. Among my __existential crisis__, my mind was always __tripping to my early past__, or my imminent future. I did not like __what__ I was living, and the worst thing was that I thought that it was not my fault. I liked to think that someday everything was going to change, but as Einstein said: “The greater insanity level is doing the same things over and over again expecting different results” So, I decide__d st__art to change my life changing little things on it. A clear example is that I started to accept my condition; I was so thin and I covered my insecurity about this with aggressiveness, bad faces to __the__ unknown people, and very big clothes. One day the guy who I talked before told me about his mother and his sister and how they died. I was amazed because many parts of their stories looked like if were related __with__ me and my family. I did not how and __even I do not discover it y__et. That and many facts more, showed me that life is too short to be complaining, and with the death of one of my best friends I corroborated that my other guy was saying the truth. So, as a result I changed my mentality doing things that I would never __done__ before. For example, smile to someone else, to be thankful with every single thing in my life, accept the others opinion and more. These mixed with my desire to change something around me, gave me the straightness and the willpower to affront my fears to what people could say about me. It was like __to be e__mbarrassed about something t__hat even does not hap__pens yet! I cannot explain it so well, but what I can say it is that I have __security on myself__ but also sometimes I feel like unprotected, but never alone. All I have to say is: enjoy your life.

Writing Goals
//I hope someday can write something very deep that people around the world could read it a know who I am. For while... I want to improve my writting to have it completly dominated.//

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