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2) Children are learning to use computers at a very early age. What are some effects (positive or negative) that computers can have on the intellectual development of children?   **Brainstormin:** Children. Intelligence. Internet. Effects. Early. Immature. Content. Pornography. Parental Control. Parents. Education. Books. Study. Research. Develop.sdfgsdfgsdfasdasd  Thesis Statement e**:** Children are affected by some negative aspects, __becuase__ they are learning to use computers at a very early age, such as lose interest in reading books, Internet's misuse, and cause less strain on students in their homework, because of the poor practice of copy / paste.  **Outline:**
 * Lose interest in reading books.
 * They preffer to stay at the computer.
 * They dont know how toread a book.
 * Less effort in student to do their homework.
 * Use of the copy/paste.
 * Plagiarism.
 * Computer & Internet's Misuse. 
 * They use the computer to play videogames.
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Arial,sans-serif; text-align: justify;">Visiting Pornographic websites.

<span style="font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">**Negative Aspects about Learning to Use a Computer Since an Early Age** <span style="font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">by Roberto Andrade

<span style="font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">"Some things Man was never meant to know. For everything else, there's Google" - Anonymous. In the last two decades, humanity __has made dependent__ on the computers. <range type="comment" id="966675">We don't want to do anything if there is not a computer next to us. That is why we have made wrong use of the computers, but children who have grown with technology has been the most affected. Children are affected by some negative aspects, __becuase__ they are learning to use computers at a very early age, such as __<range type="comment" id="932074">lose __ interest in reading books, Internet's misuse <span style="font-family: Arial,sans-serif;">, and cause less strain on students in their homework, because of the poor practice of copy/paste.

**//__Your topic sentence should be related to losing interest in reading books.__//** Some <range type="comment" id="800048">kids prefer to keep away books. Children who were born in the “computer ’s age”, those who have grown with all kind of technology, want to do everything using a computer, a cell phone or Internet. Children don't know how to read a book, or even quote a phrase. Maybe, most of those kids who are “sons” of technology, have never read a book. Kids are using now a “technique” to do their homework without reading books. **//__Create a better linking sentence that ties into the next paragraph.__//** **//__You don't mention anything about homework in your topic sentence.__//** Students are becoming lazier ; they don’t want to make an effort to make things in the right way. There is a "technique" that most of the humanity has been using with help of the computers and Internet in the last years: the "Copy/Paste". This technique is used to get information from a document on internet, a blogspot, etc. in a very quick way, but most of the text that the people copy and paste, are not __readed__ carefully. Here's when __we__ <range type="comment" id="749482">talk about something called " pleagiarism ". Plagearism is used by many people, but they ignore that they are __commiting__ <range type="comment" id="411936">a crime. To avoid __plagearism__ they must know how to quote, but to learn how to quote, they need to read. There are more misuses of the computer and the Internet.
 * //__You don't mention misuse of computers in your topic sentence.__//** Computers are not made ​​just to do our homework. Computers have hundreds of uses, but most young people use them with<range type="comment" id="483500"> issues of leisure . Some of the misuses of the computers are<range type="comment" id="110172">: playing videogames, chat with friends, or even download music and watching music videos. If parents do not care what their kids watch on the Internet, children are at risk to find pages with violent or pornographic content. Computers have something called "Parental control", to protect what their childen should visit at Internet, but not all the parents know how to made use of it.

Computers, technology, and Internet are very good tools for researching, but we need to learn how to use them. Children should be taught by adults to preserve the use of books and good reading __habi<range type="comment" id="798164">t__, not just copy and paste, as has been done in recent years. We should learn to use computers properly because, at this rate, "children" of technology (kids who have born in the last decade), will soon know more than __we__ about this issue. There will be also negative aspects for everything, but to learn to do something without supervision of someone who knows about the topic, is a real risk. Knowing how to use a computer at an early age is a double-edged __weapon__, if there is not an adult to teach them how to use it.