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Narrative Essay BRAINSTORMING:


 * Dear friends
 * sister
 * brother in law
 * my friend Paco
 * my ex boyfriend
 * cold, strong air
 * beautiful balloons
 * 2 cakes
 * Flan
 * a lot of cds
 * 2 P.P.P. (power point presentations)
 * FB invitations
 * cards
 * party
 * broke nose
 * bandage
 * land
 * hats and masks
 * music

[|Sentence outline]:
OUTLINE: à“Going to a club” __Advantages:__ Don´t worry about nothing It is cheaper Sure have fun __Disadvantages:__ Few guests They don´t put attention to me I always go to the club Space extremely small
 * Introduction
 * The call of my friend
 * Advantages and disadvantages of:

à“Make my own party” __Advantages:__ A lot of guests It is different and special My friends Everybody put attention to me Everybody will remember it __Disadvantages:__ It is so expensive I need a land Need clean it Take care with the land Neighbors and police -mañanitas -arrived at school -cake in school -poster, cakes, gifts and my friends when I arrived my bedroom -my friend visited me -my party -end of the day I. a. b. II. Claim 2 a.
 * The way to invite my friends.
 * My nose
 * The day of my birthday:
 * Conclusion

Essay:
//After reviewing the criteria for your essay, begin writing here based on your sentence outline above.//

MY BIRTHDAY My last birthday was amazing, the best of all my birthdays. Actually I have had a lot of good birthdays, but I think each birthday get over the last one. I was 19 years old, I loved that age and I wanted be 19 years old forever; unfortunately I could not be true. Now, since last Friday (it was February 4th) I am 20 fabulous years old. My last birthday was the best on e; **//punctuation (semicolon use)//** that day a lot of exciting moments and unexpected things happened; for this reason I loved my last birthday.

A week before my birthday, exactly on Friday, I was in a club, when I arrived to my house, a friend called me and he tried to convince me about to make a party for my birthday. //**Too many clauses.**// Some days before my special day, I was thinking about how to celebrate my day, and I analyzed some points of view about to make a party by myself or going to a club. Some advantages of “going to a club” //**Why use quotation marks?**// were that it is cheaper and easier, it is sure that I will have fun and that I don´t worry about anything. Next the disadvantages were that the place for my guests would be extremely small; so I would invite few guests, also the guests do not give me some attention, and the most important point: I always go to a club. About to make my own party I analyzed these advantages: I could invite the people that I want; I would see my dear friends. Everybody would pay attention to me also they would remember that party. One good reason was that I have a land for make the party there. Finally it would be different and special for me. On the other hand the disadvantages were: it would be so expensive (because I need pay the music and other details), the neighbors and police would be angry about the party because where I have the land it is a quiet neighborhood. In the end, I would take care with the land and clean it when that would be over.

I was thinking about the date of my party with some people and I decided to make the party on Friday, exactly the day of my birthday. Three days before my birthday; also my party, I sent invitations to a lot of friends via //facebook// and some others by other ways. The topic of the party was “hats and masks”. On Wednesday in the night I was training and unfortunately I broke my nose. I felt really bad. Next day, a day before my birthday I went to the doctor and he told me that I had to wear a bandage for a month. I was depressive. The time wasted so quickly and I just had time to get music; I paid $1,500 for the music, it was really cheap.

The day of my birthday I woke early because I couldn’t sleep well due to a lot of texts were sent to me by my friends, and other people called me. Then my family came to my bedroom and they song the “mañanitas”. They couldn’t wake up to me with the song. When I arrived at school (I arrived late at my classes, like always. But I promise that I will change myself and I will be punctual), I saw a lot of balloons and things in my place. It was good; but I felt that I wasn’t very happy. Then my day in school happened well but I thought that something was missing. Almost in the end my friends gave to me a delicious cake and I opened my gifts; also my best friend Naye showed me a video that she made by herself; when I was watching it, I cried; it was embarrassing. When I finished my French class I wanted to see some masks to wear in the night (in the party), but my mom called me and she told that I needed to be in my house quickly; I was suspecting something. When I was in my house, I went to my bedroom (which it is in the second floor) and it was closed, so I opened it and I was a gift of my best friend Andrea, also there were a flan and a cake; but the cake had lit candles and I had to blow them by myself. Some seconds that my sister and my nieces arrived to my bedroom. Then I saw a nice big poster stock in my closed. Some seconds after that later my friends Lili and Melissa appeared, because they were hided in other room. Finally we ate tacos, the tacos were so good. Lili, Melissa and I went to a store that is in the avenue, near to my house and we bought some masks for the party at night. When we finished, they had to go, because they had a basketball game. After that other good friend, named Francisco, visited to me and in that time my day was getting better and better. When he left my house, I had to hurry up. The time was over and I had to be in my party. I arrived to the land a little bit late; and there are just some friends. Also I forgot the dishes, glasses, sodas and ice; so a friend and I went to buy them. I felt me pretty because I didn’t wear my bandage (just during the party). The night continued, and my friends arrived there. Everything was great, because the music was perfect and a lot of people were dancing in the “palapa” (it is a space of concrete, exactly in the middle of the land) and others were drinking around this. Some friends told me that they liked that land because it is big, it has a lot of grass, it has toiled for men and women too, also it has some games for children like swing, slipping, etc. Time later I was really good and happy, suddenly I saw my exboyfriend! He was with another girl. The situation surprised me because I didn’t invite him, but I liked to see him. After that, I had few problems, like my sister discussed with my brother in law, but now everything it´s ok. I finished very tired. I slept at 4:00am and I woke at 7:30am; next day I felt bad! But I enjoyed all my birthday. I loved all my gifts, including some others that I didn’t say; they were cool, nice and creative gifts. //**Divide this into two separate paragraphs.**// I liked everything that happened in my birthday, also I liked how the things happened before my party and I think my decisions were correct. To make the party about masks was an excellent idea. I like to have a lot of good friends, because they are always with me when I need them; and they make special each one of my birthdays, like the last one. I love my parents because they help me always, they are the perfect parents. I think this birthday was the best of all my birthdays because I saw the most important people in my life. I love all my birthdays, but obviously the last one is, until now, my best birthday and I loved people who make fantastic my day.